說(shuō)到雅思寫(xiě)作的考官范文,相信很多備同學(xué)的感受都是“敬而遠之”, 認為考官的范文都是以生詞難句組成的。事實(shí)真的是這樣么?但凡可以靜下心來(lái)推敲考官范文的學(xué)生, 都會(huì )發(fā)現考官的范文并沒(méi)有我們的想象的那么難。甚至還有點(diǎn)“簡(jiǎn)單”—— 用詞簡(jiǎn)單,但句式很多樣。下邊,一起來(lái)看范文解析及一些寫(xiě)作技巧。
首先進(jìn)入到文章的開(kāi)頭段:
A child’s education has never been about learning information and basic skills only.(1) It has always included teaching the next generation how to be good members of society.(2) Therefore, this cannot be the responsibility of the parents alone. (3)
無(wú)論是第一句話(huà)中的“never”及“only”也好, 還是最后一句的“not”及“alone”也好, 考官都運用了我們在漢語(yǔ)表述同樣會(huì )用得到的一種表達形式——雙重否定表肯定, 從而增強句子語(yǔ)氣。 第二句中的the next generation 也是不錯的用法, 這也是我們上一講中提到過(guò)的less common vocabulary。 短語(yǔ)中的單獨每個(gè)單詞挑選出來(lái)大家都認識, 但是放到一起的這種說(shuō)法, 大部分同學(xué)還是無(wú)法掌握的。
接下來(lái)我們進(jìn)入到文章的主體段2:
In order to be a good member of any society the individual must respect and obey the rules of their community and share their values.(1)Educatingchildren to understand the need to obey rules and respect others always beginsin the home and is widely thought to be the responsibility of parents.(2) They will certainly be the first to help children learn what is important in life, how they are expected to behave and what role they will play in their world. (3)
首先來(lái)看句1和句2, 運用了特殊開(kāi)頭詞的寫(xiě)作形式“in order to ”(介詞短語(yǔ)放句首)及“Educating”(動(dòng)名詞放句首)。 大部分同學(xué)寫(xiě)句子時(shí), 名詞代詞放句首的偏多, 特殊開(kāi)頭詞引出句子的方法這點(diǎn)我們也是可以學(xué)習的。
再來(lái)看句子中的respect and obey 這組, 及what is important in life, how they are expected to behave and what role they will play in their world這組, 兩組都屬于平行結構, 一組是短語(yǔ)平行, 一組是平行中最高級的用法——從句平行。
本段材料的最后這句, 不僅是三個(gè)從句的平行, 而且萬(wàn)能性還很強。 我們可以把主句They will certainly be the first to help children learn中的主語(yǔ)They換成其他主語(yǔ), 如志愿服務(wù)工作。 我們再來(lái)看下這個(gè)句子, 志愿服務(wù)工作可以幫著(zhù)孩子們學(xué)習什么是重要的, 應該怎么做及應該在世界中起到怎樣的作用。 三個(gè)從句寫(xiě)出來(lái), 不僅句子長(cháng)度拉長(cháng), 同時(shí)還展示了考官書(shū)寫(xiě)從句的能力, 最重要的是, 考生們還可以學(xué)習到舉一反三的句式!
最后來(lái)看下句2的謂語(yǔ), 共有兩個(gè), 分別為begin 及 be widely thought , 一主動(dòng)一被動(dòng), 這又何嘗不是增加句子靈活度的方式?
雅思寫(xiě)作考試
接下來(lái)進(jìn)入到主體段2:
However, learning to understand and share the value system of a whole society cannot be achieved just in the home.(1) Once a child goes to school, they are entering a wider community where teachers and peers will have just as much influence as their parents do at home. (2)At school, children will experience working and living with people from a whole variety of backgrounds from the wider society. (3)This experience should teach them how to co-operate with each other and how to contribute to the life of their community.(4)
先來(lái)看本段的句1, 一方面雙重否定表肯定了- not 及just用法。 再一方面還起到了承上啟下的作用,起到對學(xué)校教育的論述。 句2, once及where引導兩個(gè)從句做嵌套, 句子雖長(cháng), 但論述邏輯清晰。 段落的句尾再次出現平行結構, 也是為了和上段做呼應。
But to be a valuable member of any community is not like learning a simple skill. It is something that an individual goes on learning throughout life and it is the responsibility of every member of a society to take responsibility for helping the younger generation to become active and able members of that society.
進(jìn)入到結尾段, 往往要給出觀(guān)點(diǎn)及看法, 這里我們看到考官在給觀(guān)點(diǎn)時(shí)用到了這樣一個(gè)短語(yǔ)“active and able”。大部分人看到后沒(méi)有任何感覺(jué), 但他實(shí)際用的是押頭韻的用法。 和其相似的還有, Beauty and the Beast, League of Legend 以及 Pride and Prejudice,只要留心, 這種在電影及雜志上的材料你也會(huì )留心到。
這就是C8T1的范文, 我們做了分析。 相信對大部分同學(xué)來(lái)講,此篇文章出現的生詞不會(huì )超過(guò)三個(gè), 甚至對大部分人來(lái)說(shuō), 這篇材料是沒(méi)有生詞的。 但是考官就是用了雙重否定表肯定, 特殊開(kāi)頭詞, 平行結構及押頭韻等等表達了多樣的句式! 所以我們看出, 真正好的作文不是生詞長(cháng)句, 而是像考官材料一樣用簡(jiǎn)單詞表達多樣的句式!